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Unread post by Sithobi1 » March 17th, 2008, 10:19 pm

Fate Prologue, right after Shirou gets stabbed in the heart by Lancer.
Sakura's flashes in my mind.
She will definitely cry.
And I recall one red-tinted day after school, a long time ago.
...A distant sunset.
Someone always running alone.
And a boring girl, staring at that from far away.
Should be Sakura's...face, probably.

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Unread post by Anonymous # 9001 » March 17th, 2008, 10:42 pm

Day 15, the Shirou vs. Archer fight (End of Battle- Answer is the exact scene name, I'm pretty sure)

"The impact breaks one of the arm and my leg"

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Unread post by Alucard » March 17th, 2008, 11:51 pm

UBW, 9th Day: Ambush
Caster`s appearance, Saber`s slash
"Do you understand you position more now, boy?"
-Should be "your"

Intermission
Poisonous snake, jack of all trades
"The change after that"
- I don't understand this line

10th Day: Awakening-School-Return home
Half the body paralyzed
"My head has clear up, as I managed.."
-"cleared"

"... one gets from having the bloodcirculation to a limb..."
-Missing space

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Unread post by Pado » March 18th, 2008, 1:16 am

I have no idea whether it's a difference between the original script and the voices, but Tohsaka certainly said "more than twenty meters away" and not thirty like shown on the screen.

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Unread post by unluckyvampire » March 18th, 2008, 1:56 am

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5th Day: Breakfast-Way to school-Everyday(II)

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Unread post by -[J1N]- » March 18th, 2008, 5:37 am

I don't know about this but....

Image

8th Day: Before Dinner - Choice


Does the font make the apostrophes turn that way, or is it supposed to be like that? I'm pretty sure they're supposed to slant "/" rather than "\", if not just straight down.

EDIT3: Just adding on to this post, and again, and yet again.

8th Day: Night - Bare-knuckle Rin

"So, I told him I'm living at your house now and I didn't have any intention of cooperating with an half-assed Master like him..."

Quite a coincidental typo here relating to that other post. Just to explain, there 'h' is not silent in this case, so there should only be 'a' rather than 'an'. Should be:

"So, I told him I'm living at your house now and I didn't have any intention of cooperating with a half-assed Master like him..."

8th Day: Night - Tohsaka Sensei's lecture on magic - S- (cut off)

When Rin lectures Shirou after he swallows jewel.

"If that's the case, all we can do is open it by force and tell your body know that there is a switch"

Two alternatives:

"If that's the case, all we can do is open it by force and tell your body that there is a switch"

"If that's the case, all we can do is open it by force and let your body know that there is a switch"

8th Day: Night - Tohsaka Sensei's lecture on magic - S- (cut off)

Shirou is thinking about strengthening, transformation and projectile magic.

"For example, you can't create a fire with a edged weapon."

THIS time it requires the 'an', instead of the 'a'. So naturally, it reads:

"For example, you can't create a fire with an edged weapon."
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Unread post by Sithobi1 » March 18th, 2008, 9:33 am

3rd Day: Night-Returning Home - One more time:
The running sliver light.
The spearhead moves straight for my heart.
It will spill blood in the next second.
I know this feeling.
The feeling of metal running into me...
The taste of blood coming up my throat...
The sense of the world around me disappearing...
I felt all of it earlier.
...And I have to experience it again? Really?
I don't understand. Why do I have to go through this?
Should be "silver light" or "sliver of light".

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Unread post by james-skarz » March 18th, 2008, 11:18 am

UBW Route: 4th day, Interlude (4-1) -
"It must be a witch's potion. The one which destroys love"
Should be 'the one that destroys love'

Also - "Stop talking and open the windows....They are still breathing. I guess it makes no difference if they get found now or tomorrow. Let's get away after we're done" Should be 'if they ARE found now or tomorrow' the second one should be altered along the lines of 'Let's leave quickily after we're finished/done'.

Also, when Rin is commenting on archer's power: 'He destroyed the proof of his heroism under his own will . It's so crazy that other servants would faint from shock if they would find out about this-----' First one should read 'he destroyed his proof of heroism by his own will'. and the second 'would' should be removed and the last five words changed to 'faint from shock if they found out about this'.

UBW Route: 5th day -

Shirou's flashback: 'That man, himself a superhero in my child's eyes, said that as if yearning for it. the my should be changed into 'a superhero in this child's eyes' or 'himself a superhero in my childish eyes'

When talking to Saber in the morning:"Oh, excuse me. Taiga is still sleeping so i jumped to a hasty conclusion that the Emiya family are not an early riser" Should be 'are not early risers'/'early to rise'.

thats all for now
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Unread post by pchunter » March 18th, 2008, 4:05 pm

uhh should i keep editing, or should i repost?



pre-information: the "----------(continuing)-------" means the error is in a different section
pre-information: "pages" are considered as one page as u scroll up. So for example 3 pages before means you scroll up 3 times.

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6th day: Ryudou Temple - ARCHER VS CASTER

"I did say so. I'm String than anyone here. Saber and Berserker aside, you shouln't even be able to scratch me."

shouln't -> shouldn't

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(edit 1)
10th day: Awakening-School-Return home - Half the body par

"She puts margarine on hear bread while she's speaking. It doesn't really matter, but Fuji-Nee doesn't use butter.

hear -> her

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(edit 2)
This happens several of times.. but i dont know if it was done intentionally :/


11th day: Afternoon, return home - Caster's attack

Their position... If Caster would do that, (random space >.>)'s face will explode like a tomato.

(random space)'s -> Fuji-Nee's


>>


The voice is enough to create sparks between them. Tohsaka glares at Caster and does not do anything. (1st random space >.>)'s life will end if she moves. If Tohsaka's going to move, I'll (2nd random space Fuji-Nee's

(2nd random space) -> ??? (no clue.. maybe several words are missing? It can be "stop" but then the rest of the sentence wouldnt make sense)


>> (starting to wonder if this should be going under the bug/glitch section)


That means... She will kill (BLANK) if I refuse.

(BLANK) -> Fuji-Nee


>>


A charming laugh. Caster urges me for my replay while digging her fingers into (blank...)'s neck.

(blank...)'s -> Fuji-Nee's


>> (man this is tiring, at this rate ill never finish UBW D:, but of course this is for the good of all the future readers :3)


An unlimited source of energy. Magical energy she sucks ot of everybody in this town. ...That's why she's going to win? She's saying she's invincible because she controls innocent people like (BLANK :O)? It's the same.

(BLANK :O) -> FUJI-NEE GODDAMMIT (Fuji-Nee)


>>


And besides, the enemy has (:evil:)'s life in her hands. There's only one answer. Even Tohsaka is biting her lips as if she has given up. -------- I... 1) Refuse. 2)Obey.

(:evil:)'s -> Fuji-Nee's life


>>


"Oh, I thought you might be clueless,but I guess you do know the position you are in."

clueless,but -> clueless, but

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Intermission - Princess Media (right after 2/12)


It has been a month since she was summoned. Since then, she has done her best to win. Her Master is an ordinary person without a Magic Circuit and she is the weakest of all the Servants. To make up for that, she abused forbidden magic. Collection from the people. The magic string she placed throughout the town and the control of the ley line using sacrifices.

ley -> key (im not sure if this is correct or not, but key makes hella lot more sense then ley line.)

*EDIT* i just found another "ley line".. so im not sure... can someone confirm that this is a mistake/isnt one? i will remove it ASAP if someone confirms/add the other "ley line" location.

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15th Day: Night - Rin's proposal(lethal dose) (rushing cause i wanna hurry on to the Rin's sex scene)

"...Im the one who should apologize. (BlanK) didn't think you would dislike it so much. ...I should have explained it to you in detail." Tohsaka looks down awkwardly

(BlanK) -> I



OKAY IM DONE FOR TODAY.... ill start again tomarrow!! with more enthusiasm. --;;
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Unread post by Sithobi1 » March 18th, 2008, 7:19 pm

3rd Day: Lecture on Masters - Tohsaka Rin(II)
"Then what are you, just an amateur?"
"That's not true, I can at least use strengthening magic."
"Strengthening... that an awfully odd magic. So, you can't do anything other than that?"
Tohsaka glares at me.
"Well, to be honest, probably not."
Should probably be "that's an awfully odd magic".

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Unread post by TakaJun » March 19th, 2008, 12:51 am

Pado wrote:I have no idea whether it's a difference between the original script and the voices, but Tohsaka certainly said "more than twenty meters away" and not thirty like shown on the screen.

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I checked the script and it says 30.
They changed some of the text in Realto Nua from the PC version, so some texts are different.
Why did TYPE-MOON change it from 30 to 20? I don't know :(

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Unread post by -[J1N]- » March 19th, 2008, 2:51 am

VS Rider(I) - Fall down, your mind

As Shinji tells Rider to finish him off.

"What are you doing, Rider?
That's enough. Just kill him now. He won't be able to do anything anyways"

Unnecessary 's' in it. Should be:

"What are you doing, Rider?
That's enough. Just kill him now. He won't be able to do anything anyway"

On another note, do we need to spoiler tag our posts? It'll be a lot harder to spot for errors already post up if they're hidden until we reveal it.
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Unread post by KaneDragon » March 19th, 2008, 3:06 am

11th day: Afternoon, return home -- Caster's attack
even if Tohsaka casts a spell, Caster's finger will light up faster than anything. Their position... If Caster would do that, ______'s face will explode like a tomato.
First, I am confused as to why there's a blank instead of Taiga's name. There are a few more blanks in the next few pages. Is it supposed to be that way? :?: Also, the last sentence is a little awkward. Replacing "If Caster would do" with "If Caster does" sounds better.

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Unread post by gokieks » March 19th, 2008, 3:22 am

UBW route, Day 12: Confrontation
Desperate projection-return alive
► Show Spoiler
No idea if that's intended or not, but sounds weird either way.

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Unread post by -[J1N]- » March 19th, 2008, 3:48 am

10th Day: Awakening-Morning - Strategy meeting

Only a minor error, so I'll be brief

"Tohsaka reacts as soon as I declare that I can't let Shinji go"

Simply missing a full stop there

EDIT: Another minor error

Same day, few lines after

"I have already gauged her ability,
I believe Shirou knows as well"

I'm confident that should simply be a full stop instead of a comma
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Unread post by gokieks » March 19th, 2008, 5:02 am

UBW Day 14
Intermission
Lance of sure hit, shield of no loss:
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Unread post by Aku » March 19th, 2008, 4:32 pm

6th Day: Ryudou Temple - Fall down, your mind

When Shirou feels the killing intent from behind him, this is written:
"I jump back as I turn turn around...
At the same time, Archer swings his sword."

/me turn turns around

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Unread post by TrevoriuS » March 19th, 2008, 9:46 pm

11th day, UBW, return home, caster attacks
Basically during the entire scene Fuji-nee's name doesn't show up but is replaced by empty space. Is this an error only I encountered? It is only in this scene and so obvious I expected it to be reported already.

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Unread post by Ephyon » March 19th, 2008, 10:24 pm

Fate Route, Day 6. A Strategy Meeting, should we challenge the Ryudou temple?

Just as Shirou tells Rin and Saber he met up with Shinji, they both reply:

Rin: "Wha... Rider's Master!? When did this happen!?"
Saber: "Ridiculous! Meeting with another Master by yourself, what were you thinking!?"

No actual mistake, but Saber's line is missing the voice.

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Unread post by MugiMugi » March 19th, 2008, 11:26 pm

A space is missing ^^, in middle of day 2.
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