should be some sort of verb between "i will" and "to the church" (go, talk, etc)
v1.0 - ciel route: should be close to her good end
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Day 7, Arcueid Route, in the hallway after Hisui wakes up Shiki
"Don't worry about, just forget it. More importantly, I'm kinda hungry. Is breakfast ready?"
Should be 'about it', or reword the sentence to something like 'Don't worry, just forget about it.'
Day 7, Arcueid Route, in the courtyard
"I'm an older brother stupid for his little sister.
Yeah, I really am.
Need quotation marks after 'sister'.
Day , Arcueid route, after the movie theater
"Man, hearing about it and seeing it were two entirely different things. Even though I knew some background information about what a movie theater was, my imagination fell short of reality.
..... Arcueid gives a happy, heart-felt smile.
Need quotation marks after 'reality'.
Day , Arcueid route, in the restaurant
This exorcist may have even came here just to seal me rather than fight the vampire who lives in this city."
You like the word 'came' a lot, don't you?
"..... What is this? Then you're all by yourself?
"Yes, that is the life of a vampire.
Need quotation marks after 'yourself'.
Day , Arcueid route, looking for Arcueid in the shopping district
Arcueid can't find them, but I can tell The Dead if I take off my glasses.
Judging from the context, I think something like 'identify' or 'see' would make more sense. Or something like 'but I can tell The Dead from humans', if you really like the word tell.
Henduluin wrote:Third day, Hisui route:
Went to school after not finding Satsuki the night before.
"Miss Yumizuka was took in"
Should be "was taken in".
White wrote:I don't mean to push this further, but are you sure the came error was already fixed? It is different to the other come/came errors in the topic as far as I can see, so i'd just like to be sure there has been no mix up.
White wrote:Anyway, here are some more.
All Arcueid route
Day 10 "Cream"
Seeing that smile assures me that this is my world.
"Man, what is it Tohno? Making such an difficult expression."
Should be "a".
Chapter 11 Day 10, with SHIKI at school
Suddenly, SHIKI flies back as if he was struck by an car.
Should be "a" car.
She's right in front of me; she's not an illusion.
But, I feel like there is an distance which can never be spanned between us.
Fixed and all that jazz.